Incomplete Division–A Negation Poem

Like gongs
Fractional silence

Calm deficiency
Deadened insincerity

Dust black
Dry acid

End begins
Immodest maturity

Voiceless release
We push away

A scream
Pause linear

Frozen motion
Unsavory slurp

Silence unyielding
Death veto

Smooth apathy
Animated inhale

Inert truth
Incapacitated sedateness

The original hy(na)ku was an experiment in the way beautiful-sounding words sounded paired with descriptions of the sound according to my experience.

You can find the original poem here. The “revised” version is in response to Phoenix Rising Guild prompt to replace words in a poem with its negation.

In a traditional Hay(na)ku, there are:

  • A tercet: 3 lines.
  • A total of 6 words: 1 in the first line, 2 in the second line, and 3 in the third line.
  • There is no restriction on syllables or stressed or rhymes.



5 thoughts on “Incomplete Division–A Negation Poem

  1. I think this is wonderful. You can tell you savor each word.

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    1. It was the first time attempting it and it felt like a complete dream. It took a while to come back to reality 😀


  2. EXCELLENT. This small piece is quite full. My favorite kind of poetry.

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    1. Thank you 😀 I have a background in speech pathology so I have loved the physical feel of sounds and words for some time.

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