Obscurity
Like gongs
Fractional silence

Division
Calm deficiency
Deadened insincerity

Mute
Dust black
Dry acid

Cowardice
End begins
Immodest maturity

One
Voiceless release
We push away

Periphery
A scream
Pause linear

Discordant
Frozen motion
Unsavory slurp

Dispersed
Silence unyielding
Death veto

Merciless
Smooth apathy
Animated inhale

Illiterate
Inert truth
Incapacitated sedateness


The original hy(na)ku was an experiment in the way beautiful-sounding words sounded paired with descriptions of the sound according to my experience.

You can find the original poem here. The “revised” version is in response to Phoenix Rising Guild prompt to replace words in a poem with its negation.

In a traditional Hay(na)ku, there are:

  • A tercet: 3 lines.
  • A total of 6 words: 1 in the first line, 2 in the second line, and 3 in the third line.
  • There is no restriction on syllables or stressed or rhymes.

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