Holding Pattern

Still not return.
Still not outside.
How many days?

One hundred and twenty. One hundred and twenty-one.

transmitter in the attic, how it sent
voice over the sea—
over waves, across borders.

stories terrifying
difficult to believe.
letters for capons, hams, hens.

wine through the mail.
lambs in suitcases on the train,
meat for an enormous profit.

fined for locking doors,
keeping doves,
hoarding meat.

No eye contact.
No chatter.
no lovers strolling
such rules are not written down

Icy winds whirl
inside old room, slow rain of hours
fingers over seashells

ordering by size, species, morphology,
checking and rechecking,
not missed a single one.


For today’s NaPoWriMo poem, I was inspired by Margo Roby: Wordgatherer to fashion a poem out of a found source text. The source text is a small section from Anthony Doerr’s book, “All the Light We Cannot See.”

I began by removing proper names and personal pronouns–soon followed by present tense verbs and specific places. From there, I inserted my own line breaks as well as removal of a few phrases to make the poem run smoother. I hope you enjoy it 😀

Image by Boyoun Kim

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6 thoughts on “Holding Pattern

  1. While I am unfamiliar with Doerr’s book – I can just imagine these words out of the mouths of any war survivor… especially my father-in-law of WWII.

    Thanks for stopping by… Ulric has a brother Velvel…
    https://juleslongerstrandsofgems.wordpress.com/2015/04/25/unofficial-v-for-mj-april-2015-s/

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    1. I’m addicted to the story mainly because of his ability to use sound, touch as well as visual images to convey the story. Glad you stopped by!

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      1. Ah… yes, WWII… I just looked it up. Looks very interesting indeed. I only have a reading list twenty arms long… but at least it is on the list now 🙂

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      2. I hear ya! I’ve had my eye on this one since it came out last year lol

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  2. Fun, isn’t it?! I find it quite an addictive little exercise. My favourite image from yours is:

    Icy winds whirl
    inside old room, slow rain of hours
    fingers over seashells

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    1. It is fun 😀 Lately my Muse has been hiding (it may have to do with NaPoWriMo..lol) so these alternative ways to creation are a life saver. Plus Mr. Doerr’s story was so much fun to use. He can use words to create more than just visual images 😀

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